“Albert Einstein was one of the most brilliant physicists in the world, and is known best for the theory of relativity, which explains the relationships between time, space, matter, and energy. His formula “E=mc2″ is universally known. He worked with quantum physics, which seeks to explain the behaviors of sub-atomic particles. Albert Einstein interests me because he was very intelligent and he thought in a different way than everyone else.”

I hope this helps. I would have given a “B” on the paragraph, but then again, I did proof-reading of college papers for a few years. I tried not to edit-out your “voice”, so I kept my changes to a minimum.

Overall, great job! I would grade it in the 90’s.

I think you should include more on why he interests you. Does he inspire you to “think out of the box”?

What else did he come up with besides the theory of relativity?

Check out this link: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Albert_Einstein

Talk about your own personal experience on how he inspired you. That would make it great. Teachers love stuff like that.

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