“great amount” is awkward

5 = plural/ is = singular

Also, write out numbers under 100

First sentance is a runon

Avoid over using the word “great” Vary your adjectives.

Capitalize the first letter of first and last names

“has served” suggests he could serve again (he’s dead)

the is a definate article (points to a specific person, place or thing)

Does Penn possess the landing?

Liberty Bell sentence is a fragment

Commas need to be inserted into the date

Offset introductory clauses with a comma

Betsy Ross sentence is muddled with fragments and runons (break it up)

Over all, you could use more specific details to explain why each site is fun, historic, and intersting.

Philadelphia has a great amount of historical, fun, and interesting places to visit including five of the most awesome places.The Philadelphia Zoo is a great attraction for the young or old. Penn State Prison, where Al Capone has served, is a great place for ghost hunters! There is also Penns Landing, which marks the area where William Penn first set ashore to coin the city of Philadelphia. The Liberty Bell, famous for ringing on July 18th 1776, announced the first reading of the Declaration of Independance. Last, but not least, the Betsy Ross House; Betsy Ross is famous for sewing the first American flag. Philadelphia has many places for everyone.

Question: What does Al Capone have to do with ghost hunters? Suggestion: “is a great place for history buffs.”

Philadelphia has a great amount of history, fun, and interesting places to visit. Here are five awesome places to visit. The Philadelphia Zoo is a great attraction for the young and the old. The Penn State Prison where Al capone has served time is a great place for ghost hunters! There is also Penns Landing which marks the area where William Penn first set ashore and founded the city of Philadelphia. The Liberty Bell which is famous for ringing on July 18th, 1776 to announce the reading of the Declaration of Independance. Last but not least the Betsy Ross House. Betsy Ross is famous for sewing the first American Flag. Philadelphia has many places for everyone to visit and have fun no matter your age.

ok it’s pretty good but in each one add a little more details on it