A few days ago
Anonymous

Please edit this sentence?

But being around a friend who is constantly “snuggly” with someone is one of my biggest sensitivities, and whenever I would bring it up to him the conversation would always go off on another tangent, with my friend and I arguing.

Ok want to KEEP this as ONE sentence, make sure all the tenses are in agreement and after friend and I shoudl i say ” arguing” or “getting into an agrument”? Also make any other synonyms for words you think need to be changed. This sentence is about feeling uncomfortable with the fact of being “3 in a crowd” when my friend is making out with someone in front of you. Any writers, or teachers, or ones with good writing and grammar skills please reply, thanks

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A few days ago
maî

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Your wording of the question is wrong. You don’t want the tenses to be in agreement with each other; you want them to be correct. Part of your sentence is conditional, and that affects the tense of the dependent clause.

Also, stringing sentences together with “and” to force them to be a single sentence is not exactly good writing.

And you have a number of examples here of bad writing. It isn’t necessary to begin with a conjunction. It adds nothing to this sentence, so delete the “but”

Being around a friend who is constantly “snuggly” is one of my biggest sensitivities.

If it is a couple you’re talking about, I would say so:

Being around a “snuggly” couple is one of my biggest sensitivities.

Next sentence:

Whenever I would bring it up to him the conversation would always go off on another tangent, with my friend and I arguing.

with is a preposition and its objects are friend and “me”–you don’t use I in the nominative case here, but ME in the objective case…

Whenever I would bring it up to him, the conversation would always go off on another tangent, with my friend and me arguing.

You don’t need conditional here; it works better in present tense:

Whenever I bring it up to him, the conversation goes off on a tangent, with my friend and me arguing.

The prepositional phrase at the end is weak, so I would change it to:

Whenever I bring it up to him, the conversation goes off on a tangent, resulting in an argument.

Now, putting the sentences side by side:

Being around a “snuggly” couple is one of my biggest sensitivities. Whenever I bring it up to him, the conversation goes off on a tangent, resulting in an argument.

Now we’ve lost the connection, so I rewrite to get this final result:

My friend knows that being around a “snuggly” couple is one of my biggest sensitivities, but whenever I bring it up to him, our conversation goes off on a tangent, resulting in an argument.

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A few days ago
Bethany
Being around a friend who is constantly snuggling with someone is one of my pet hates, but whenever I bring it up, the conversation always goes off on a tangent and we end up arguing.
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A few days ago
aredsailjunk
Hand him the key card to a Holiday Inn Express, saying

“I know we would all feel more comfortable if you would use this…first night on me, but up to you after that “

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5 years ago
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Has green eyes.
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A few days ago
aunt_webby
why dont you just tell them ” go get a room ? “
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