I knew there would be music, vendors, and down-to-earth people, but everything else was a surprise to me.

The nighttime environment seemed to make everything a little creepy since I had no clue what to expect or where I was

The man I first encountered had long dreadlocks and a t-shirt that read “staff”.

I had to dodge the dazed and intoxicated campers, as they were unaware that a car could possibly kill them.

Sounds like Glastonbury! 🙂

The nighttime environment seemed to make everything a little creepy; especially, because I had no clue what to expect or where i was at.

The man I first encountered had long dreadlocks, and t-shirt on that read staff.

While doing this, I had to dodge the dazed and intoxicated campers, as they were unaware that a car could possibly kill them.

”The night time, environment seemed to make everything a little creepy; especially because I had no clue what to expect, or where I was at!”

”The man I first encountered, had: long dreadlocks and a t-shirt on that read ‘staff’.”

”While doing this, I had to dodge the dazed and intoxicated campers! As they were unaware that a car could possibly kill them.”

I had no clue where I was or what to expect, which made the nighttime environment that much creepier.

The first man I encountered had long dreadlocks and wore a t-shirt that said “staff”.

I dodged the dazed and intoxicated campers who were oblivious to the dangers of an oncoming car.

crowd. All else would be a surprise.

I was lost, and darkness made everything a bit more creepy.

I felt my breath catch. What would happen now.

The first man I met wore stringy dreadlocks and a tee

shirt that said, “Staff.”

I dodged the dazed and drunken campers, who seemed

unaware of impending danger

Use semicolons to join two sentences:

Maggie was at the dentist; John was at the video store.

Or:

Maggie was at the dentist, but John was at the video store.

second sentence…….you ended the sentence with “at”….bad grammar.

third sentence….could be re-worded better.

fourth one…aok.