A few days ago

MrsBaker

Another One: Need help with a word in a sentence for grad school personal statement?

the sentence is:

Perhaps most importantly, I have a genuine drive to help people, paired with sincere empathy and compassion.

I want to replace the word “paired” because doesn’t pair generally mean “two”?

Any suggestions?

Thanks

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A few days ago

nicolemcg

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Perhaps most importantly isn’t a great phrase. Too many adjectives (Perhaps, most, sincere, genuine) clutter up the sentence.

Try this.

My most important trait is my drive to help people, fueled by empathy and compassion.

(drive and feuled is very clever, unless you’re applying for an environmental program).

Hope that helps. Good luck!

A few days ago

Anonymous

Perhaps most importantly is that I have a genuine drive to help people, along with sincere compassion and empathy. 🙂

A few days ago

ghouly05

Most importantly, my sincere empathy and compassion for others drives me to help people.

A few days ago

dansinger61

Just drop the last part altogether. Sincere empathy and compassion already imply that you have a drive to help people. If you state that you have a drive to help people, the rest is just redundant.

A few days ago

gehme

Above all, my sincere empathy and compassion drives me to help others.

A few days ago

rd211

You could change it to “…help people, paired wth MY sincere…” Then you are in fact pairing two things: your drive, and your qualities (emphathy and compassion).

Alternatively, you could write, “…help people, complemented by my sincere…” “complemented” doesn’t imply two, or three, or any given number, so you may prefer that.

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