A few days ago
S281

Could someone please look over my personal statement and offer any suggestions?

In view of your educational experiences and the socio-economic environment in which you grew up, provide an example of a challenge you faced. How did you overcome or strive to overcome this challenge?

Growing up I did not believe that an education was that important, which also caused my grades to suffer as well; usually putting it aside in order to have a good time with my social circle. Looking back on my previous lifestyle and being raised in Oakland County has made me realize how important an education is in order to succeed in the ever evolving world of business. I have since put forth full dedication towards my education in order to become a valuable asset in our society.

When I first started at Oakland Community College I had no clue as to what I wished to pursue, oftentimes changing my major around based upon friends’ majors. This involved taking many classes which were of no interest to me. This along with a bad habit of laziness which followed me from high school caused me

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A few days ago
sean1201

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Triple read everything. You have some spelling mistakes in there. Spelling mistakes are considered juvenile in college. There shouldn’t be any.

Even though it took you a while to figure out an education was important, at least you know now.

Good luck.

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A few days ago
wakesetter14
Good….but seriously consider dropping the laziness part. The point is to brag in your statement, saying you have a bad habit of laziness and skipping class will NOT earn you any points.
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A few days ago
Anonymous
Sounds excellent to me. I don’t think you have to take out the laziness part, you might just want to downplay it a little. I think it shows that you are a real person, not a god, and you have overcome things (which is what they’re looking for).
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