He uses emotive, passionate language when referring to the people of his country as “smug faced cowards”. This suggests he believes that people…

Aside from the quotations, I think that you should expand more on your points. Your use of terminology (tone, emphasis, persuasive arguments, emotive, passionate) is excellent–but unless you elaborate more on each of your points, your paper will not be as strong as it has the potential to be. You sound as though you know what you’re talking about–the next step is to organize and elaborate.

In your introduction, you state that the two poems differ in tone and emphasis–take your time to pove each of those points. I don’t know how long or detailed this is intended to be, but in your shoes I would separate your paper into a section about tone and a section about emphasis. In each section, analyze the individual poems and show the differences between them. You sound as though you have the knowledge to easily separate your paper in this manner. Keep up the good work–I bet that your paper is going to be awesome. :o)