I think it was a great essay. I haven’t read either poem and liked the way you put the pieces of each in the paper so I could understand your words in regard to the poem. My only editorial comment would be that I saw several places which need commas and there were none. Certainly not an issue, for me, which would cause me to give something less than an A. I’m not an English or Literature teacher–I teach K-5 science. I do, however, enjoy a well written paper and I believe this is one. I feel the words are more important than the punctuation so if the words are done well, I would mark the punctuation issues and discuss them with the student (or maybe the class if a lot of students had the same problems) at a later date.

Good writing! Keep it up! 🙂

wow, no wonder you got an A. The story was superb, but I kind of found that you kept on using the impressive vocab over and over for instance “juxtaposing”….

Maybe you could try a synonym…. like… from these that I searched up of.

http://thesaurus.reference.com/browse/juxtaposing

But thats just if you want people to pinpoint your minor problems. No one would ever give you trouble :).

Anyhow, I really liked your writing, very deep.

I kind of do that, all my teachers comment that my writing is deep, so complex that students of my grade that could not even compare but however, my grammar isnt as impressive.

You have a good talent of writing, again, I liked how you described each line…

I know its bad place to ask, but can you please send me your email. I could use someone as illiterate as you to proof read my essays and such and give me tips if that isnt asking for too much.

Thank You.

i read ur piece and must say was very impressed, i think the way u analysed both works and compared was very astute and can see why u received an A* , to be honest i feel it cant be improved any more, as when i read i knew i readin a piece from a person who has undertook a lot of research, and really put thought and feelin into this.very well done and congratulations