A few days ago
HELPPPPPP!!!!!!!! please!!!!!!!!!!!?
I’m writting my essay and i need to know if this sounds ok …or maybe you can help me with it a little bit??? THANKS! This is only part of my essay!
Becoming a doctor has always been a passion of mine since i was a little girl. When i was a little girl I used to play Doctor with my family and always have, now that im older i see my true passion on being a doctor. I love to help others and make them feel truly comfortable. I want to be a doctor with all my heart. I want to serve others. I have shared the lives of my patients as a personal care attendant I have laughed and cried with them. This is what i want to do with my life!
Top 2 Answers
A few days ago
Favorite Answer
instead of writing when i was a little girl after the full stop just put i used to and were it says now that i’m older put now that i’v grown…maybe. but it sounds really great. well done
0
A few days ago
“Becoming a doctor has always been a passion of mine since i was a little girl.”
-I would replace the word passion with the word dream since you use passion in another sentence.
“i see my true passion on being a doctor.”
-It should be “I see my true passion OF being a doctor.”
Other than those I think it’s good.
0
- Academic Writing
- Accounting
- Anthropology
- Article
- Blog
- Business
- Career
- Case Study
- Critical Thinking
- Culture
- Dissertation
- Education
- Education Questions
- Essay Tips
- Essay Writing
- Finance
- Free Essay Samples
- Free Essay Templates
- Free Essay Topics
- Health
- History
- Human Resources
- Law
- Literature
- Management
- Marketing
- Nursing
- other
- Politics
- Problem Solving
- Psychology
- Report
- Research Paper
- Review Writing
- Social Issues
- Speech Writing
- Term Paper
- Thesis Writing
- Writing Styles