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Can you please revise this paragraph for me?

Here is the question:

Suppose Ichiro Suzuki was coming to your school and you have been asked to introduc him to the other students. Write a pragraph describing Ichiro’s baseball career and the qualities that make him unique.

Here is the paragraph:

Ichiro Suzuki, a right fielder for baseball’s Seattle Mariners, moved to the American major leagues for the 2001 season from Japan. That mafe him one of the first non-pitching Japanese players in baseball history, sparking intense interest in both the U.S. and Japan. One of the best hitters in the game and a seven-time All-Star, Suzuki’s fame is such that he is often called by a single name, Ichiro. Ichiro is extremely fast, can hit the ball anywhere he pleases, and plays solid defense. The quality that make’s him unique alone is his swing. The swing, produced by an exaggerated leg kick, shifts his weight forward as he swings the bat, which adds additional power to his swing.

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A few days ago
Jennifer O

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Only a few spelling errors I’m sure were just simple mistakes. 🙂 It sounds good.
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A few days ago
rikaroony
That mafe him one of the first non-pitching . Made not mafe :o)
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A few days ago
Daisyhill
Nothing to revise…it’s very good.
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