A few days ago
Anonymous

please revise and edit my easy paragraph thank you?

We must live a life that we are devoted to God. We need to thank for the Holy Spirit to be with us and let us anointed. Also, we must pray for every day because there are too many things for thanking to Jesus including breathing, receiving an A in your worst subject, or speaking in tongues. We must let everything that we love including sports cars, our best friends, or money leave aside and only praise the Lord. Then, do you know what is the Holy Spirit going to do? He will surely help you everything. We must bring Jesus glory and honor. That is the purpose of creation. God intentionally created Adam for praising his holy name. We, the son or daughter of Adam, have the right to praise up the Lord’s name too. The Lord doesn’t look at your appearance, yet he looks at our hearts and he will judge us. We have to live in his grace.

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A few days ago
Anonymous

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That doesn’t need editing its fine!
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A few days ago
teacher93514
We must live a life that we are devoted to God.

Change “we are” to “is”.

We need to thank for the Holy Spirit to be with us and let us anointed.

Remove “for” and change “to be with us” to “for being with us”. Change “let us anointed” to “anointing us”.

Also, we must pray for every day because there are too many things for thanking to Jesus including breathing, receiving an A in your worst subject, or speaking in tongues.

Change to “We must pray every day because there are so many things to thank Jesus for, including breathing, receiving an A in your worst subject and speaking in tongues.

We must let everything that we love including sports cars, our best friends, or money leave aside and only praise the Lord.

Use a comma after “love”. Change “or” to “and”. Use a comma after “money”. Remove “leave”. Use a comma after “aside”.

Then, do you know what is the Holy Spirit going to do?

Move “is” after “Spirit”.

He will surely help you everything.

Insert “with” after “you”.

We must bring Jesus glory and honor. That is the purpose of creation.

These two are OK.

God intentionally created Adam for praising his holy name.

Change “for” to “to”.

We, the son or daughter of Adam, have the right to praise up the Lord’s name too.

Change “son or daughter” to “sons and daughters”. Remove “up”.

The Lord doesn’t look at your appearance, yet he looks at our hearts and he will judge us.

Change the comma to a ; and remove “yet”. Change “your appearance” to “our appearances”

We have to live in his grace.

This is OK.

You need to be careful that your subjects, verbs and objects match. Many of the changes I made are because you have mixed singular subjects, verbs and objects with plural subjects, verbs and objects in the same sentence. This is very common with persons studying English as a foreign language. If possible, find a native English speaker who can teach you how to diagram or parse a sentence in English. This is not usually taught in English classrooms, but it is a valuable tool to understanding the construction of English sentences.

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