L.A. Paragraph- help with closing sentence?

So in Language arts we are making “beautiful paragraphs” and I just cant get my closing sentence to sound right. Here is the paragraph without a closing sentence:

Hearing the carving in the snow, or the ball bouncing from racket to racket on the court, I remember why I love to play, and not watch, my favorite sports. Some of my favorite sports include tennis, snowboarding, swimming, volleyball, soccer, basketball, and softball. The reson why I love these activities is because I get to have fun, exercise, and be with friends. If I just watch them I am not interested. I have never liked to watch sports on TV, I only like watching them up close, or actually being in the game. This is because I like to be in the excitement, and not just watching it.

This is the closing sentence that I came up with but I really dont like it:

Sports are one of my favorite things to do in my spare time, and I am facinated and care deeply about them.

So can you help me think of a new one?? Thanx!

Top 4 Answers

A few days ago

Alexandrea

Favorite Answer

In the end, sports are better played than watched and that is why i am so facinated and deeply involved in them.

It’s not my best, but since the paragraph isn’t personal I can’t really give a true answer.

A few days ago

Anonymous

Here’s what I came up with. Do you mind that I corrected the paragraph to make the flow better? Truthfully, leaving the paragraph this way at the end expresses your feelings to the reader. See if you don’t agree. Thanks for giving me a chance to help you:

Hearing the carving in the snow or the ball bouncing from racket-to-racket on the court, I remember why I love to play and watch my favorite sports. Tennis, snowboarding, swimming, volleyball, soccer, basketball, and softball are some of my favorites because I get to have fun, exercise, and be with friends. Just watching dulls my interest–up close and personal is MY style.

4 years ago

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A few days ago

Anonymous

How about:

Sports make my world a great place to work, live and play.

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