A few days ago
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Is there something wrong with this sentence?

{Ed sat on my left side while holding my hand during the entire procedure. }

Is it a run-on sentence? Does it need adjusting?

Top 8 Answers
A few days ago
Dark Prince

Favorite Answer

I think a better sentence would be

Ed sat on my left and held my hand throughout the entire procedure

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A few days ago
reynwater
During the entire procedure, Ed sat holding my left hand.
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A few days ago
Anonymous
i think it should be… Ed sat at my left side, or Ed sat beside me… and Try changing the sentence to During the entire procedure, Ed sat beside me while holding my hand so u could differentiate the actions done more clearly 🙂
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A few days ago
Tox c
It’s sort of awkwardly phrased. It might sound better as

[Ed sat by my side and held my hand during the entire procedure.]

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A few days ago
twin_pig
you could try:

“Ed sat on my left side, holding my hand during the entire procedure”

or

“Ed sat on my left side, while holding my hand, during the entire procedure”

just to break it up a bit.

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A few days ago
Katey B
I’m with the Dark Prince on this one. While the other answers are also well-written, they don’t include which side Ed is sitting on which is an important part of the visual description.
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A few days ago
michelle
Ed sat on my left side, while holding my hand during the entire procedure.

and the camma after side

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A few days ago
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Go with Dark Prince.
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