A few days ago
Anonymous

how is this thesis?

Blanche DuBois’ privileged upbringing left her unprepared for the tragic obstacles she was forced to face and therefore made Blanche confused and physiologically disturbed.

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A few days ago
Srm2212

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sounds good
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A few days ago
hello molly
I think that the beginning sounds good, but the ending is a little awkward. What made her confused? The obstacles? The background? Both?

If you take out the priviledged background:

Blanche DuBois’ mental deterioration results from an inability to deal with the many conflicts arising in her life, leading her to become…

You can still use the privledged background in the body of the paper, but just in a different way. Rewording the thesis gives you more freedom. The other way, you will be forced to talk about the background as it relates to the breakdown throughout the paper. Also check spelling on psychologically, and speak in present tense.

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A few days ago
stoneinthestream
Good start, though it got a bit confusing toward the end. How about taking out “she was forced” and changing to “…obstacles she faced.” ? Then your next sentence can include her confusion and physiological disturbances (do you actually mean that? or perhaps you mean “psychological”?).
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A few days ago
ruth4526
Short but fine.
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A few days ago
vanessa1m
it good!!!!!!!!!!!!! i love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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