He said, (add comma)

My boy, (add comma)

your life, (add comma although it is a bit optional

I would take all the ideas of your father and put them in quotation marks. What you’ve done is mix direct and indirect discourse. You CAN do this, but why?

You’ll have to remove some words to do this.

For instance:

“always remember that choices have consequences. Always study your choices carefully….

Don’t say “this is so because….” Simply say (remember, you are now still within your father’s quotations, “…benefits of a given choice. Choices could have bad consqequences….

End his quotation with the words: irreversible results.

Now use a new paragraph.

I said to may father, (use a comma)

“Thank you, father, for the advice. I will….

(note that father should be within commas. Begin a new sentence with “I will

All in all, not a bad paragraph. It just needs a little cleaning up.

By the way, I sure wish the value system that resulted in this relationship with your father were still around today–at least in the US.

Good luck. And say hi to your father for me!