A few days ago
Anonymous

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This is the start of the first paragraph in my Great gatsby/american dream paper. I need you to read over it and tell me if it makes sense or if theres any mistakes or anything. I also need help thinking of the next sentence ( explain the quote ) so if you have any ideas let me know.

Although Gatsby was able to achieve his goal of becoming a wealthy man, he is unable to achieve the American dream. One of the reasons why Gatsby is unable to achieve it is because he is involved in illegal activities, such as, “buying and selling grain alcohol over the counter”(Fitzgerald 134).

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A few days ago
Anonymous

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Although Gatsby [was] able to achieve his goal of becoming a wealthy man, he is unable to achieve the American dream. One of the reasons {why} Gatsby is unable to achieve it is because he is involved in illegal activities<,> such as<,> “buying and selling grain alcohol over the counter”(Fitzgerald 134).

It’s cool. The [was] needs to be in literary present tense (is).

The {why} is redundant and can be removed.

The <,>s are unnecessary.

You might consider taking out the ‘is’-s throughout the paragraph and choosing some action words.

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A few days ago
te144
Although Gatsby achieved his dream of attaining wealth, he failed to achieve the American dream. His failure resulted chiefly from his involvement in illegal activities, such as ……………………….. be concise and non-repetitive wherever possible. The reader appreciates that the most. You’ve got a good start going. And keep your ‘time frame’ words consistent……..”was able” clashes with “is unable” BEST OF LUCK!
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A few days ago
Anonymous
when the economy is bad, there is no american dream.
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