Within four months, Terry Fox collected a record breaking 24 million dollars for the Marathon of Hope. Not long after that, he retired in 1981.

Oh, and your topic question is wrong too; it should be “ARE there any mistakes”, not “IS there any mistakes”

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You need a dollar sign before 24 or the word dollars after million, and you need a comma after Hope. Alternatively, you could put a period after hope, take out and, and capitalize not.

Cheers,

Bruce

Just missing a comma after ‘and’.

You’ve got to match up those nouns and verbs. As for your sentence, you may need a comma I think. Just read the sentence out loud a few times and see where you pause when reading it out loud… maybe you need a comma right there. Luck…

Your question, however, needs correction: Are there any mistakes? Please tell me if ther’re any mistakes in it.