Help! Fix this paragraph please!?
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The hunter kneaded his head in an attempt to shake the remnants of his bizarre hallucination, then slowly raised himself to a sitting position. As his hands pushed at the ground to lift his upper body, they sank slightly, fingers curling downward into soft, loose sand. (Transition into looking around him) Dark, empty beachfront to either side of him, dense forest behind him, and infinite black ocean stretching forever deep into the horizon.
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vis·age (vzj) n.
1. The face or facial expression of a person; countenance.
2. Appearance; aspect: the bleak visage of winter.
Instead, try to substitute the word with another word or phrase, and then it’ll work better for you.
Try one of these instead- scrutinized, surveyed, gazed, assessed, regarded, considered….there are so many!
…soft, loose sand. He took visage of the area in hopes of regaining his bearings, but was only met with dark, empty beachfronts to either side of him, dense forest behind him, and infinite black ocean stretching forever deep into the horizon.
Hope that helps 🙂
around him there was a dark, empty beachfront. a dense forest laid behind him, and infront of him, an infinite deep ocean streched forever into the horizon
hope this helps!=)
“Shaking the clouds that fogged his vision, he attempted to focus on his surroundings. Parts of his brain told him he had been here before, but others parts denied that claim. Nothing made real sense.”
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