A few days ago
Anonymous

hello, I’m applying to a western company?

and i need u to check this excerpt from questionnaire for mistakes, pls answer ONLY from people with native english

I am especially interested in the activities ranked above from financial advisory services to participation in the companies audit because it gives the prospects to gain from my knowledge in accounting, finance and economics. In addition working in either of these departments allows to develop personal skills and abilities in the most dynamic courses of business activity for the exceptional goal to serve clients.

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A few days ago
dnldslk

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I AM a native American.

The paragraph as written is absolutely horrendous. Do NOT put it on your resume.

I have so much trouble trying to figure out what you’re saying, I have a hard time even attempting a revision.

It’s turgid. It’s bloated with big words that are put together poorly.

If I understand you correctly, a rewrite might be:

Because of my experience in economics, finance, and accounting, I would be especially interested in an assignment involving auditing or financial advisory services. I look forward to helping your clients in these activities.

Please note that your whole resume probably needs revision. My revision above will look silly if it’s surrounded by other paragraphs of laughable English. Sorry–your prose sticks out like a sore thumb. I urge you to consult a resume-writing service.

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A few days ago
sakthi
I think tat was ok………. Do well 🙂
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