I hereby inform you that, while waiting for confirmation of the 6 days reservation for His Excellency from Hotel A, we have also made reservations at Hotel B as a backup in order to ensure accommodations during His Excellency’s attendance at the SAT Conference being held November 8-14, 2007. Attached are the room types and rates.

Changes = took the , out after Excellency. Changed ‘those’ to ‘this’ and it should flow so you could read two parts like this

“I hereby inform you that while waiting for confirmation from the Hotel A about the possibility of 6 days reservation” … “as a backup, we have also reserved” (etc.)

If you can make it shorter by possibly moving the “in order to attend the SAT Conference in November 8th to 14th, 2007” to the end of the statement it would make it easier to read, so say you could write out the second hotel reservations then, “regarding the matter of the SAT Conference in November 8th to 14th, 2007”.

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We are awaiting confirmation from Hotel A for a 6 day reservation for His Excellency to attend the SAT Conference November 8th to 14th, 2007. As a backup, we have also reserved hotel accommodation for His Excellency for the same time period with the Hotel B, for which the room types and rates are attached.

Please find attached rates and accommodation information for each Hotel for the period 08/11/07 – 14/11/07.

… are you asking them to choose? or are you covering your options? … just wondering ?

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