A few days ago
suray f

correct this please..?

“The aforementioned goal is extremely difficult to achieve; improving the conference hall and holding two economic roundtables will not solely have BC as bla bla. The modifications to the BC conference hall was a promising step towards achieving the objective…..”

“improving” doesn’t sound right to me!! also i want anyone who reads this to know that “the modifications ” sentence is a follow up for the previous “the afore..” sentence i just can’t think of a suitable conjugtion word to connect them together…

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A few days ago
Tatsbabe

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Put a full stop after the word achieve. Then start a new sentence. Maybe you should say ‘The improvements to the conference hall and the staging of two economic roundtables’.

After ‘the modifications to the BC conference hall’ it should be ‘were’ not ‘was’.

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A few days ago
Starfall
Are you talking about “refurbishing” the conference hall, or “renovating” the conference hall? Those are the words that come to mind. Could you use “nevertheless” as a connecting word? Also, you need to make your verb agree; it should be “The modifications to the BC conference hall WERE a promising step…”

Hope this helps.

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