A few days ago
Amma’s Child

Can you help make this sentence shorter?

This sentence is too long to read right? I would like to make it shorter yet impact our senses.:

“We grow up having so many fond memories of eating delicious sweet yams, mashed potatoes smothered with gravy, grandma’s delicious stuffing, buttery green vegetables, thick slices of turkey topped with cranberries, honey-flavored ham, and that slice of pumpkin pie topped with whipping cream that we eagerly look forward to. ”

Thanks in advance for your great suggestions!

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A few days ago
Spots^..^B4myeyes

Favorite Answer

“We grew up having many fond memories of eating delicious sweet yams; mashed potatoes smothered with gravy; and grandma’s delicious stuffing. We enjoyed buttery green beans; thick slices of turkey topped with cranberries; and honey-flavored ham. Dessert was always a slice of pumpkin pie topped with whipping cream. We eagerly look forward to Thanksgiving. “
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A few days ago
Jeannie Welsch
I agree with Blond and Tall, you have my stomach growling.

“We grow up having so many fond memories of eating delicious sweet yams, mashed potatoes smothered with gravy, grandma’s delicious stuffing, buttery green vegetables, thick slices of turkey topped with cranberries, and honey-flavored ham. Then, let me not forget there’s that slice of pumpkin pie topped with whipping cream we eagerly look forward to. “

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A few days ago
slobberknocker_usa
Never end a sentence in a preposition!

…. memories of eating foods like: delicious, sweet yams….

…. whipping cream that we eagerly anticipate.

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A few days ago
Jen2U
We grow up having so many fond memories of eating such delicious holiday food. The favorites were ………………… . We always looked forward to that slice of pumpkin pie with……….. .
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A few days ago
picador
Don’t the memories come AFTER we’ve grown up?

“Among the delights of childhood is the discovery of delicious foods, which come to be associated with the loved-ones who prepare them for us.” Not nearly so vivid as your mouth-watering exposition; but you did ask for “short”.

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A few days ago
YveyK
If you put a semi-colon after memories it makes more sense and doesn’t lessen the impact.
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A few days ago
Blond&Tall
I have no sugggestions, but I just wanted to say thanks because now I am going to the vending machine, you made me hungry! 🙂
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