A few days ago
reshma

can anyone please correct my english for me in the following?

Sometimes it is hard to introduce yourself because you know yourself so well that you do not know where to start with. Let me give a try to see what kind of image you have about me through my self deion. Here it goes…

I am a student. I’m pursuing my education to attain a diploma in teaching and I am very passionate about my education.

I’m quite shy but when people get to know me, they find I’m dependable and my company is enjoyable. I like being honest and just being who I am. I’m a person who is positive about every aspect of life and enjoying the good things life has to offer. I like to dream; I like to talk, I like to listen. I like to see the sunrise in the morning, I like to see the moonlight at night; I like to feel the music flowing on my face, I like to smell the wind coming from the ocean. Sometimes I like to be alone and sometimes I like to be surrounded by people. It all depends on mood at that time…

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A few days ago
Anonymous

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We feel you should write this like this to get your true feelings out and express the real you:)

I am very shy once people get to know me they always find, I am dependable, honest, and very positive, and enjoy being who I am. They come to discover they like and care about me. I tend to enjoy every aspect of life and living my life to the fullest extent! Most want to be around me for my personality, and for the person I am, on the inside and out! Some of the things I enjoy most in life are, talking to others, listening to there concerns and daily feelings, and there companionship. I love to see the sunrise in the mornings, and the moonlight at night! I like to feel the sensations of music on my body! I love the wind when I feel it coming in off of the ocean; it feels so great to me. There are times I love to be alone to sort things out, and then there are times I want to be surrounded with my friends and other people. My life it self depends on the mood I am having at the time it occurs!

Hope you like it:)

Rags37

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A few days ago
jenni
Sometimes it is hard to introduce yourself because you know yourself so well that you don’t know where to start. I’d like to see what kind of image you have of me after listening to my self description. Here it goes…

I am a student. I’m pursuing a diploma in teaching and I’m very passionate about my education.

I’m quite shy but when people get to know me, they find I’m dependable and my company is enjoyable. I like being honest and just being who I am. I’m positive about every aspect of life and enjoying the good things life has to offer. I like to dream, I like to talk, I like to listen. I like to see the sunrise in the morning and the moonlight at night. I like the smell of the breeze coming from the ocean. Sometimes I like to be alone and sometimes I like to be surrounded by people.

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A few days ago
Anonymous
It is very good, but almost all of your sentences start with “I” or “I like”. it is too repititive. just change the “I’s” and “I like’s” and it’ll be perfect.
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A few days ago
TiaRanita
And I’d like to date you!
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