A few days ago
babysteaks3

Is this sentence put togethr correctly? If not, how can it be written without leaving any details out?

Now this does not begin to sum up the whole experience of working in a law office, but, it does take a look at the tiny details that make working here at RC & K a more hospitable experience for employees and clients.

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A few days ago
Anonymous

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I would say something like …

This summary does not totally describe the experience of working in a law office, but, it does examine the tiny details that make working here at RC & K a more hospitable experience for employees and clients.

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A few days ago
Hoosier Mom
It could be worded differently or more simply…something on the order of

While only hinting at the overall experience of working in a law office, it sums up the essence unique to RC & K that demonstrate its hospitality and compatibility for both employees and clients.

or

The experience of working in a law office could be elaborated infinitely. However, included are the unique details that make working at RC & K positive for employees and clients alike.

Hope this helps (:

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A few days ago
xK
– No comma after ‘but’, only before.

– I wouldn’t use ‘tiny details’; try ‘a few of the reasons’ or something similar.

– Is ‘hospitable’ really the word you want to use? I don’t know what the details were that led you to believe that was the proper word choice, but it sounds really awkward to me. ‘Hospitable’ is generally used to convey warmth toward strangers; employees wouldn’t be considered strangers, and hopefully you don’t consider your clients strangers either. Maybe something like ‘enjoyable’ or ‘friendly’ or ‘positive’.

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A few days ago
Conor
yes it has been put together correctly and you have used good language too.
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