A few days ago
Skye R

College Application Essay?

Hi everyone! I have been working on my college application essay and I’m not really too happy with it. If anyone is willing to edit it (constructively), I’d really appreciate it.

P.S. It IS about how much I love writing, but the only thing I honestly don’t enjoy writing are essays. So PLEASE don’t make any comments about how a writer shouldn’t need help. Even professionals have editors.

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A few days ago
SMS

Favorite Answer

I really don’t think you should start with “All my life . . .” as the other responder said. Immediately the admissions people will groan and go “Oh my goodness, not another one of those “All my life” crappy essays! STICK WITH YOUR OPENING!

I think your essay is fantastic and to be honest I don’t see that you need to do anything to it other than this section:

“There, I learned how to write Haikus, Free Verses, Metaphors, Narratives, and Sestinas”

You don’t need to capitalize these words.

Good luck!

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A few days ago
barb
try this for your first paragraph

All of my life I have been a writer. Give me a pencil and words flow through my fingers to paper. Time is frozen. I am captivated, entranced, pulling words from my brain and putting my ideas to paper. My definition of utopia is a blank paper, a plot, characters, and time to linger with my notebook to see what happens next.

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A few days ago
Trawl
I dont see any glaring mistakes…though you might want to check up on capitalization.

If you havent already, ask one of your teachers to look over the essay. They try not to change your writing style too much, usually they only point out when something is grammatically incorrect.

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