A few days ago
Anonymous

Rate my poem?

I ran onto the tropical heavenly paradise and felt the golden sand tingling between my toes,

As the sea leaped above the crystal clear blue sky I knew I’d ridden off all my woes,

The sun was now a blazing red, fierce, fiery and ferocious as the sombre lion,

And the tall leafy palm trees were looking down on me, protecting beach Hawaiian,

As I lay down, I was in a world of my own, trapped from all ‘reality’

I listened to the wooshing sounds of the waves and the gleaming sky was all I could see

Shells – Tiny droplets of heaven were scattered everywhere

Some as soft and smooth as a giant teddy bear,

Following the sea was like walking around the world and back and it’s waves were never-ending

They kept splashing onto the golden ground below and never decending,

As they day grew darker, the tide grew higher, gathering as much sand as it could,

All the memories I had at the paradice from child to adulthood,

I never saw that beach again, Never saw the sky gleam so bright, the waves blast onto the golden ground,

Never again did I see that sight.

Top 5 Answers
A few days ago
RE

Favorite Answer

I know you are proud of it, but why post it again? You are fishing for compliments. Get over yourself and keep writing.
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A few days ago
David J
Okay I hate poetry but I decided to put myself through the torture of reading your poem and I have to say I like it so yeah you get a 10 on that one. Everyone else gets a 0 cuz I hate poetry lol
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A few days ago
REVLON
Hi! your poem is marvellous.You should be proud of yourself, as u are able to write such a beautiful poem.I would rate your poem as 10 on 10.Keep writing such good poems.Wish you good luck !
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A few days ago
jen
ten on ten
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A few days ago
Anonymous
its great
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