A few days ago
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can someone read this and tell me if this sounds okay as of right now?

and if it needs more detail

also can i have some ideas on what else i should write next.?

I never thought I would be one of those kids whose parents would have to tell them to pack there belongings and move out. All though I am not a troubled child or cause a lot of problems, there was one night that my mom and I had just totally blown up on each other. Before I knew it, I was being told to get out, that I was not welcome in my own home anymore. As I packed my stuff one by one I had someone there for me who I knew I could count on. She is one of the most intelligent persons I have ever known. She is an excellent influence to me, whether it is motivation to get health and car insurance or to look at things differently, and to realize that being dependent isn’t always a good thing, that being able to be independent will only make you stronger and a more organized person. She is my Aunt Vicki.

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It needs some work in terms of grammar, sentence organization and keeping thoughts clear. Here are a few edits:

I never thought I would be one of those kids whose parents would have to tell them to pack their belongings and move out. Although I am not a troubled child and I don’t cause a lot of problems, one night my mom and I just totally blew up on each other. Before I knew it, I was being told to get out, that I was not welcome in my own home anymore.

As I packed my stuff one thing at a time, I had someone there for me whom I knew I could count on. She is one of the most intelligent people I have ever known. She is an excellent influence on me, whether it is for motivation to get health and car insurance or to look at things differently. She has helped me realize that being dependent isn’t always a good thing, that being able to be independent will make me stronger and a more organized person. She is my Aunt Vicki.

Vicki has a way of holding my attention no matter what she is telling me. A bomb can go off behind me and I might be distracted for that one second because of the loud boom but I am would go right back to what she was talking about. I just love to listen to what she has to say. I might not be able to elaborate on it, or give advice or know anything about it, but that’s the beauty of Aunt Vickie. She has that intelligence, so that what she is telling you is fact. She is not just sitting there telling you about something she doesn’t know anything about. Because she can hold my attention, she has really taught me many things that I can use now and later on in life.

You may want to elaborate on the specifics of how she helped you, particularly after you left home. Possibly describe a little Best of luck.

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