A few days ago
Anonymous

Writing a paper on SLAVERY. Need help with thesis. Please read over my thesis and give idea/suggestions.?

My paper is based on the book The History Of Mary Prince. Mary Prince was born into slavery in the Carribean. My paper is an analysis of this book. Here is my idea for a thesis, please give ANY suggestions. Thank you.

The History of Mary Prince led me to the idea that early European peoples, who came to the New World, felt the need to be in control. One of the ways this need for control was displayed was by slavery, the brutal treatment of the slaves, how the Europeans worked the slaves till near death, if not beyond that point, and finally the way white women treated the slaves.

To get an A in this class the thesis needs to be: clear, easy to understand and insightful

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A few days ago
Mrs_M

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I understand what you’re saying. I’d suggest changing the “white women” to maybe European women. Only because first you mention European and then it switches to white women. I’d make the first sentence sort of a summary of what’s to follow (which I think you’ve got). So the “white women” doesn’t quite fit with that.

Sounds like it will be an interesting paper.

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