Photography has influenced society. For instance, many people consider it improper to travel without a camera. People would’t feel that they went on a good vacation if they didn’t have evidence of the places they visited. In addition, Sontag surmises that a person with a camera is transformed into an obsessive and active observer because he is the one mastering and controlling the situation in the photograph. The photographer would be able to depict someone smiling, sad, or upset, which would show event details. It might not matter how the pictures looks. It would always have a message and help people remember certain feelings or events. Even if an event has passed, the photograph would keep it alive. Sontag also uses examples of art such as two films called Man with a Movie Camera (1929) and Hitchcock’s Rear Window (1954). These films illustrate and express the pain, feelings and movement depicted in them. Finally, she shows that if a camera person is interested and involved with the subject , he’s going to focus without changing its matter. That way, the photo is made more worthy and interesting.

It appears that this is your thesis?:

The author argues THAT photography is practiced everyday as a normal daily activity rather than a form of art.

Here are specific sentences and suggestions for improved wording:

Most people only take pictures to have a chronological record of events of their families, like when the kids are small or for significant milestone ceremonies like a graduation. Photography is also used to list extended family members for prosterity.

You use the words “like” and “such as” too many times within just a few sentences. Separate them into separate sentences with fuller explanation of each example if necessary.

If you keep this sentence, your tense should be past perfect.

People wouldn’t feel as if they had gone on vacation if they didn’t have evidence of the places that they had visited to remember them by.

However, changing the sentence into a positive form rather than using 2 negatives would better–something like this:

People use photography on vacations in order to have evidence of the trip and remember the places they visited.

In the next few sentences, you use “because” and “such as” and other phrases to indicate examples more than fleshing out the examples.

Finally, she explains that in order for someone to take a picture, that person has to be interested and involved with the subject they’re going to focus on, without changing its matter. That way the person would be able to make the photo more worthy and interesting.

This was a final point–you still need a conclusion. So what should the reader come away with as a result of reading Sontag’s article? We need to change how we take pictures? We need to think of photography as art in addition to a visual recordkeeping device? Something I missed totally–was the article meant to be persuasive or informative?–that is also something you can draw out in your summary.