A few days ago
Steven Wu

Please help me correct the following short- paragraph …thanks?

“Please correct my grammar if there is any mistake ”

NAS is a kind of hardware device which is able to provide high-speed performance and economic support for file sorting, file storage, and file transfering for network clients on internet

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A few days ago
quatt47

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I think it’s fine except I would leave out the ‘kind of’ and say

NAS is a hardware device which is able to provide high-speed performance and economic support for file sorting, file storage, and file transferring for network clients on the Internet.

‘Kind of’, ‘sort of’ and similar expressions are known as ‘redundant phrases’ since they serve no useful purpose. In other words NAS is either a hardware device or it’s not. If it is then it’s not a ‘kind of’ device.

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A few days ago
miss_cris101
NAS is a hardware device which is able to provide high-speed performance and economic support for file sorting, file storage and file transferring for network clients on the internet.

I am an English teacher, please use this version or quatt47’s as most of the other answers are flawed a little (sorry guys). You may want to use “type of” instead of “kind of”, or just leave it out all together if you want to sound more self-assured.

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A few days ago
lynne c
NAS is a hardware device, which helps you to provide performance & economic support for file sorting. It can also file storage, and NAS Device can also transfer file for network clients in the internet..
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A few days ago
Anonymous
I’d take out “kind of”, because it makes it seem like you don’t know what you’re talking about. And it flows better if it’s just “NAS is a hardware device that is able..”

& a period at the end!

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A few days ago
Anonymous
Sounds perfectly fine to me. You might use “enables” instead of “is able’ and leave out “file” with storage. Might even eliminate “on internet,” since network already clarifies that.
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4 years ago
Anonymous
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