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Anonymous

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A Samaritan comes up to a man falling into the hands of robbers and feels sorry for him. Therefore, the Samaritan bandages his wounds, pours on oil and puts the man on his own donkey. Furthermore, the Samaritan gives two silver coins to the innkeeper to look after him. That is what the true love is about. Jesus is compared to the Samaritan and the wound person is compared to us being robbed by devil. The Samaritan pours his oil on the wounded skin. How many people come up to strangers who are wounded and send him to the hospital? I think no one. I experienced it before. When I fell on the floor and got fainted. I thought there were people who were willing to help me, but many people standing but not wanting to help me go to the hospital or saying “are you okay?” as a priest sees the wounded man and walks to the other side. They were just watching me without any motions as if they are mentally challenged. I learnt a lesson that the world can abandon me, but only one doesn’t.

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A Samaritan comes up to a man who had just been robbed and feels sorry for him. The Samaritan bandages his wounds, pours on oil and puts the man on his own donkey. Furthermore, the Samaritan gives two silver coins to the innkeeper to look after him. That is what true love is all about. (or u can say “This is what true love really is”) Jesus is compared to the Samaritan while the wounded person is compared to us being robbed by the devil. The Samaritan pours his oil on the wounded skin(not connected well into story). How many people come up to strangers who are wounded and help heal him? I don’t think anyone would. I have had this kind of experience before. When I fainted and fell on the floor. I thought that there would be people who were willing to help me, but many people stood around, and no one tried to help me go to the hospital or asked if I was alright, as a priest sees the wounded man and walks to the other side. They just watched me, not moving, as if they were mentally retarded. I learned a lesson that the world may abandon me, but there is one who wouldn’t.

He is willing to help me. He is Jesus. Whenever I am depressed, he feels sorry for me and pats my shoulder. In this way, he is like the Samaritan.

i tried to keep as much of your original ideas/text as possible while still making it grammatically correct or with better word choice. i hope u like it.

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