Opening of story?
The Crash
I can remember it like it was yesterday, not that I want to remember. I was driving home from a party with my girlfriend. We had a few drinks and I wasn’t paying attention to the speed. I kept going faster and faster. I remember Jess pleading me to stop, I wished I had listened and none of this would have happened. But I was 18 and thought I was impenetrable, nothing could hurt me.
The scream that my girlfriend let out was horrifying. It was a nightmare only worse as it was real. It was too late; I was defenseless and I could do nothing. The two cars crashed head on like two raging bulls fighting. They where ballerinas, dancing around each other before crashing to the ground meters away from where they had leaped into the air. The scene was like a painting by Salvador Dalí, with out of place objects littering the narrow jet-black street .
The crash was a ripped and crumpled page from the story of my life
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Can I make a suggestion? Why not rewrite your second paragraph and use only the page metaphor? You could say that the cars were like bits of paper caught up in a gust of wind, whirling around each other, then being shredded into little bits and littering the street — like fragments of your life.
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