A few days ago
kimneedsathesis

Is This A Good Thesis For My AP History Paper On A Book?

MY THESIS:

“1776” describes how our forefathers weren’t as great as everyone makes them out to be by their lack of discipline, lack of experience, and lack of making clear decisions that made them lose most of all the battles during the Revolutionary War.

yes or no? and why?

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A few days ago
Anonymous

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One tip is to use “were not” instead of “weren’t” (never use contractions in a formal paper)

Try saying “…our forefathers were not the strong leaders that most people imagine due to their lack of discipline, experience, and decision making abilities that resulted in numerous failures in the battles of the Revolutionary War.”

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A few days ago
old lady
A thesis is a statement that you intend to prove in the course of your paper, dissertation or whatever.

What you have given is a topic sentence – telling what your essay is going to be about.

If you want to make a thesis statement out of it, you will have to say something like:

In the war of 1776, history has credited out forefathers with being disciplined, experienced and adept at decision making, but the fact that they lost most of their battles during the Revolutionary War throws doubt on that assumption.

Now – since there was both a winner and a loser in the war of 1776, you have to identify which side you are refering to, and then back up your statement with examples, quotes, references and all that other good stuff that makes for such interesting footnotes.

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A few days ago
notyou311
It is hard to prove a negative. Re-word it to say that it shows the weaknesses of the forefathers in their efforts to …
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