A few days ago
alayna

I’ve never written an descriptive essay and I’m having to write 1.Can u tell what I’ve done wrong. HElp

The Cross Roads is a tiny community of about 55 homes in Rowlett. This Community is not a wealthy community but a well kept one. In my community we have a people that keep themselves in the know of what’s going on. One of those members would be Keith, he is curious member. If you were to see him you wouldn’t think anything of him. He’s simple tall grey headed elderly man that wears the same thing every everyday. It’s always a T-shirt with blue jeans and white tennis shoes. But looks are very deceiving. He’s the eyes and ears of this community. Their isn’t anything that goes on without his knowledge. He could kept you more current about the Cross Roads News than the New York Times. Another member of our beautiful community would be our mid 30-something’s couple. Heidi, is a very quite and reserved wife of David’s, but David her husband he thinks he’s a tiger. I believe he was given the wrong brochure when he was deciding on purchasing a home. Because he’s thinks we live in a nudist colony. This man never has a shirt on. When he mows his lawn, I believe in his mind he looks like a Bay Watch babe running down the beach. But with those red little swimming it’s not a beautiful sight. I feel like I’m watching a horror film in my front yard. Despite all the faults of our community I can say that it’s a great place to live and raise children. I love my community even though it isn’t normal but whose is?

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A few days ago
Anonymous

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I enjoy your essay.

I would make this into four paragraphs.

1. Introduction

2. Keith

3. Heidi & David

4. Conclusion

Your sentences would have to be changed a bit to ensure that pronouns have antecedents. You also want to check things like verb tenses (He could kept you; should be: He could keep you…)

Good luck!

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4 years ago
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A few days ago
Josh C
Combine sentences to make them run good. For example: “He’s simple tall grey headed elderly man that wears the same thing every everyday; a T-shirt with blue jeans and white tennis shoes.” That sounds much better with the sentences together. Use symonyms!!! online Thesauras “M-W.com”
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