A few days ago
~loser~

I need help on this story that im writting English class….?

“Sound the alarm!” the first-mate shouts on the radio. The lifeboats crashing in to eachother and life jackets flyig everywhere. Down below men crashing into things trying to fix the radio wires. Kids Crying over hurt knees and elbows. Sailors trying to find first aid kits and parents. “Captan!” shouts the first-mate. “Where’s the captan?” he asks the watch-man. “was he thrown overboard?” thought the 1st-mate. No communication form below deck, with only one thing to do. The 1st-mate left his post and went down below to the engine room. “Where do we stand with fuel?” asks the captan. “Captan, we’ve lost 4 lifeboats, a count of 20 life jackets, the first aid kit went overboard, and the radio is out.” explains the 1st-mate. Then Suddenly a loud burst came from above. The captan and the 1st-mate rushes atop to findout what the sound was. “A flaregun a mile north of us!” shouts the watch-men…..

now I am all out of Ideas.. What should I put nex? any ideas would help me alot

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A few days ago
David M

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You’ve got good action up til now. It’s time for something quiet and menancing. “Meanwhile, in the bottom of the hold, a masked man flipped a switch on a bomb. His maniacal laughter boomed through the empty metal room.” Now you can alternate between the activities on deck and the actions of the bomber down below.
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