A few days ago
Anonymous

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I need help with creating a topic sentence for the paragraph below..

this paragraph is trying to say that a good teacher is a teacher that is relatable..what do you think?? any suggestions of what to add or take out? what else makes a teacher relatable? I always have trouble forming paragraphs…

Many students appreciate teachers that are likeable and relatable. You always seem to come to class with a smile and an interesting fact that was sure to capture a quick response from the students. As we were allowed to ask you questions you ask questions in regards to us as students as well. You didn’t make the students feel inferior and your facts and theories didn’t show superiority aside from already standing in front of the class.

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A few days ago
old lady

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Okay. I am a professional writer and if you want some hard facts about your paragraph, here they are.

Check the meaning of the word reliable. I don’t think that is the one you want to use. Reliable means, in this context, that your teacher comes to class on time each day. That’s pretty much a given, and not something that is commendable.

It’s great that your teacher is likable, but most teachers would like to think that they are more than just a buddy to the kids in the class. They would like to think that the kids actually learned something while they were in that class.

I like your intro, that your teacher came to the class with a smile and an interesting fact that captured a quick response from the students – but how about comments on what happened after that? Did that interesting fact lead in to a memorable lesson? Did you actually learn something? The bit about asking questions of each other sounds more like a ‘getting to know you’ process. This would be far more meaningful to the teacher if you commented on her teaching style and perhaps alluded to one particular thing you learned, especially if it was something that you had been having difficulty with – and what led to the ‘aha!’ moment when you broke through.

Did she leave you with a thirst for learning? Something that you will carry forward to your next year’s class?

This isn’t meant as a putdown, but your question and your paragraph read as though you are seriously looking for help, and if your paragraph had turned up on my desk, those are the comments I would append to it.

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