Anyone can get ahead in America if he or she works hard enough. Do you agree? Why or why not?

Business man, with his brain, and know-how to employ it in the right way, in time could make a fortune that the farmer never ever dream of.

On other hand, even though the business man makes more money than the farmer, he may not ever feel that he is rich. He will try harder, use all his skill and talent to expand his business. He may not feel (scarified- satisfied?) until he is as rich as Bill Gates. He would never see himself as successful and always be looking forward for a new ambition.

Compared to the business man, the farmer might not have a brand new car, a Victoria house and taste gourmet dishes in a deluxe hotel, but then he is happy with his life. His family are more important than everything. He feels he is successful because he has a house to live in, a job to work, and a family to come back home to after a long day in the field.

I want to point out that because in my personal opinion, I think that everyone needs to work hard in order to become useful to the society in which they live and for their own good, but to be successful let themselves decide.

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