A few days ago
krystal G

COLLEGE ESSAY!!! what do u think??? feedbacks please!!!?

what do u think? what do u think the university will think?? any errors?? feedbacks appreciated!

When I look at this picture of myself , I realize how much I’ve grown physically, mentally, and as a person in the last few years. Less than one month after this photograph was taken, I arrived at North Shore Community College without any idea of what to expect. Surrounding me in this picture are the things which were most important in my life at the time, and today’s photo would be different.

If I am accepted to Northeastern University I will strive to be a tremendous community member and student by devoting all my time to my studies and to Northeastern. .I believe that because I work hard and don’t give up easily. I believe that I am obligated to use my talents in a constructive manner, in a manner that benefits society in a manner that will help maintain the strong community on the Northeastern campus.

Becoming a Doctor has been one of my dreams for as long as I can remember, ever since I was a little girl. Now that I am older I am truly passionate about becoming a Doctor, and believe I am ready to rise up and meet this challenge. I love helping others and making them feel more comfortable. I am passionate about becoming a Doctor so that I can help others. I have shared the lives of my patients as a personal care attendant. I have laughed and I have cried with them. I think I am ready to take the next step and actually help my patients as a certified Doctor.

The medical career gives me the unique opportunity to express my many talents while benefitting human life. Completing medical school has always been a dream of mine. like many others I have been through times of sorrow. I have watched love ones in pain, with uncertain futures, and just recently an Uncle has reappeared in the lives of my family. I am glad to see him back and I’m sad and worried about is life. He has been diagnosed with throat cancer and must undergo chemotherapy Which was a complete shock to me and my family. Watching his struggles urges me to learn more about steps into recovery and how I can help. It is my experience that Physicians don’t just treat bodies; they also listen to patients with their heart and mind because sometimes illness is helped by friendship.

I believe that I have good social skills, and I believe that these skills will make a good foundation to be a successful student and Physician. . As a sales consultant, I interact and communicate with a variety of people, expanding my ability to discuss a wide range of topics. Because people seem to frequently disclose their personal issues to me, I have learned to become a good conversationalist and an excellent listener. I believe that my ability to improve and enhance my communication skills makes me well suited to pursue a medical career.

I am highly motivated to succeed. I dramatically improved my grades following a time at North Shore Community College. In the past year I have learned a lot through my experiences and relationships. I’ve realized that I was trying so much to make everyone else happy that I wasn’t keeping myself and my interests in mind at times when I should have. Once I realized what goal I wanted to pursue in my life, I plan to work hard to succeed in achieving this goal.

I have been diligent in my pursuit of medicine as a career because I am convinced that medicine offers me the opportunity to live a fulfilling, rewarding life dedicated to helping others. I will enter medicine eager to learn. Attending Northeastern University would be one of the greatest rewards for my motivation and persistence for success.

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All I see are “I’s” you have too many of them!