Can you help my boyfriend with his essay?
1) Wrong decisions I have made especially with school work, but I feel that I’m ready to excel.
….
2) Two years I have been denied any help…
I think it should be like this…
1) I have made many wrong decisions especially with school work, but I feel ready to excel.
2) I have been denied any help for two years…
Or
For about two years now I have been denied help…
What do you think? Which sounds better?
If it were my essay it wouldn’t sound anything like that, but I tried not to change too much of it.
Favorite Answer
For two years, I have been denied help …
And KUDOS to you for posting your work for critique rather than asking us to do it for you! It would help however to see the entire essay in context rather than trying to edit it piecemeal.
1)I have made many wrong decisions especially IN school work,but I AM ready to excel.
I do not understand your 2nd sentence though…
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