I am writing you to share my opinion on the punishment of students. The crimes that I believe should be punished are as follows:

First, assaulting a staff member is a deplorable and highly punishable offense. School staff should not have to fear assault by students. If a student assaults any member of staff, the student must be suspended for a minimum period of 60 days or half of the semester.

True to the laws of our country, discrimination in schools should also be punished. A student who acts upon a prejudice should be publicly shamed by apologizing to his victim from the courthouse steps, with cameras rolling or while wearing a huge sign stating what he or she has done. Finally, fighting in school should be punished. Students caught fighting should participate in an extracurricular educational activity or be suspended for a week.

Thank you for your consideration, and I hope that you will look favorably on my opinion.

I am writing you to share some ideas I have concerning student crimes and how they should be punished. Here are some examples. First, assaulting a staff member should be forbidden. School staff ought to be free of the threat of assault by students. If it is found that a student has attacked a member of the staff, that student must be suspended for a minimum period of 60 days or half of the semester.Second, discrimination, that is the use of race, national origin, religion and/or mental disability as a basis for treating students in a negative manner will not be tolerated. A student who has discriminated against others should be shamed by classmates into apologizing to the victim on the courthouse steps wearing a huge sign describing the crime while cameras roll

Finally, fighting on school grounds should be prohibited and student offenders compelled to participate in an educational activity or face a one week suspension.

I thank you for your time and consideration and I hope you will respond favorably to my proposals.

You did a nice job of this you just had some unnecessary and duplicated words in there. It’s not a good idea to use the exact same phrases over and over people can get confused, so I changed them around a bit, It reads smoother now, I think.

I hope this is helpful to you.

I am writing with regard to you to share my opinion on public student punishment. I have a bright idea for the crimes that should

be punished and how it should be punished. Here are some examples of the crimes that should be punished. First, assaulting a staff member should be

punished. School staff should be allowed to be free from any assault

by students. If it is discovered that a student has assaulted any

member of the staff, the student must be suspended for a minimum

period of 60 days or half of the semester. Second, discrimination

should be punished. Discrimination is use of race, national origin,

religion and mental disability as a basis for treating in a negative

manner. A student who has done something against discrimination,

he or she should be shamed by public students by apologizing to

his victim from the courthouse steps, with cameras rolling or wearing

a huge sign that shows what he or she have done in public

Things in parenthasis are my thoughts…exclude them from your paper:

I am writing with regard to you to share my opinion on the public punishment of students. (Otherwise sounds like you only are writing about the punishment of students that attend a public school) I would like to share with you some ideas I have regarding the crimes that should be punished and how each should be punished. (Not sure why, but I didn’t like the words “bright idea”…) First, assaulting a staff member should be punished, asschool staff should be allowed to be free from any assault by students. (Was sounding too choppy) If it is discovered that a student has physically or verbally assaulted any member of the staff, that student must be suspended for a miniumum period of 60 days, or half of the semester. Second, discrimination should b punished. Discrimination is defined as use of race, national origin, religion, and mental disability as a basis for treating someone in a negative manner. A student who has been discriminatory against staff, or his or her peers, should be shamed in public. He or she should be forced to appologize to his or her victim from the courthouse steps wearing a huge sign that shows what he or she has done, with news cameras rolling.

Good luck…hope this helps!!

Suspension does not work, because for someone who does not really care about their education will love having time off. Those students should have to stay in school in a separate room. That would be known as the Suspension Room. So the rest of the school will know that they broke a rule.

Pretzel is one of my least favorite snacks. Even though it looks appetizing and delicious, in fact, it never tastes good to me. Unlike sweet and softly-melting cookies, the prezel has a salty taste that detracts it from the value. In addition, the toughness is rough because of salt crystals on the pretzel. The reason that I don’t like pretzel is because of its salty taste and roughness. Even when I eat a few pretzles, I usually feel that they dull my taste. There are lots of pretzles in my house, but I prefer sweet cookies to tasteless snacks, so I don’t eat pretzels at all Moreover, the salt crystals, make my fingers feel rough and coarse. Therefore, I don’t like pretzel at all.

Someone can, but I’m not going to. Writing is a process that takes time and dedication. You can’t take a short cut, so to speak. Edit it yourself, and then have a friend or teacher read it.

do not address the reader, do not refer to yourself or your ideas, just state them, do not say here are some examples, good luck

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