A few days ago
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can anyone read and check my essay for mistakes? PLEASE!?

CAN ANYONE READ MY ESSAY TO CHECK IF I MADE ANT PUNCTUATION OR CAPITILIZATION MISTAKE WHICH I BET I DID SINCE I HAVE A POOR GRAMMAR! anyways here my essay…

To start, Lisset was an excitable child. Most days, mom and dad had no idea what to do with her. Lisset was the name given to me at my birth, March 28, 1992, or so does it says on my birth certificate. I grew up in Columbia with two big brothers. I loved my elementary school and the funny incidents. My favorite childhood story was when Mrs. Suarez got pregnant and everyone in class started asking her about her gigantic stomach, this is how she replied “I have a baby in my tummy”. That day I went home crying and when my mom asked me why was I crying I told her that “Mrs. Suarez ate a baby and now she is going to eat me too!” everyone started laughing and I got mad. This is how my childhood was used to be, funny and adventurous.

Furthermore, we moved to United States of America when I was 11 in February. It wasn’t very hard for me to adjust because the new environment really didn’t affect me. I graduated from Jose Marti Middle School and started High school this year. High school seems exciting and very promising because how I do here will determine my future. Currently boys aren’t my first priority as there will be specific time for that but I’m sure its not now. I want to make sure I do what I can to reach my goals during these 4 years.

In Addition, 10 years from now I want to see myself as a successful lawyer working for U.S government to make a difference in this society. I also want to build hospitals for poor people in Africa and other countries. Along with those goals, I want to get married and have a kid so I can educate him/her so that he/she can do something good for humanity. To sum up, That’s pretty where I came from and where I’m going, like me or not, give or take, That’s who I am.

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A few days ago
Anonymous

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i would put “and other poverty stricen countrys” and instead of the him/her thing put them and they and you have a run-on sentence “Along with those goals, I want to get married and have a kid so I can educate him/her so that he/she can do something good for humanity”

stop at “educate him/her” period. then put “i hope that they will do something humanitarian.”

really good 🙂

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5 years ago
seavey
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