stand up on the stage …. and look across the croud and yell welcome back. then go to the

Each new beginning holds the promise of success.

We should create an exciting vision of ourselves and the life we desire.

Why don’t we write down a plan of action for accomplishing our goals.

Magical things tend to happen when you put pen to paper or finger to keyboard. The very act of writing things down, brings them out of our heads and into the physical plane.

So I recommend all my friends to set short term, measurable goals and assess your progress periodically. We should establish a support system and accept the strength of others to supplement our own.

Now I would like to conclude by saying that :-be positive, spend time in prayer and trust the yearnings of your soul

i would have gone simpler though.

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MY FELLOW STUDENTS WELCOME BACK.

ahead of you is a term that will be full of challenges. accept each new challenge and defeat it. only those who challenge themselves will take on all the challenges of the term ahead. be a person who challenges and not a person who follows.

people who challenge are the people who lead.

support those who need the support and have a great term sucseeding in your goals,

ty goodnight

After a long time of hibernating for us all, I would like to welcome all of my friends, (this morning or evening). I hope you had a happy and relaxing time during your vacation. Now it is time to make new resolutions and begin a new term. As we all know, each new beginning holds the promise of success for each and every one of us.

We should try to create an exciting vision of ourselves and our desires in life.

Why don’t we start by writing a plan of action for accomplishing our goals?

Magical things tend to happen when we express our desires by making an outline, (whether it be on paper, on by utilizing our computer skills). The very act of documenting our desires takes our thoughts and puts them into a visual, accomplish-able setting. So, I recommend all my friends to set short term measurable goals and assess progression periodically. We should establish a support system among us and accept strengths and suggestions of others to help support our own.

I would like to conclude by saying: Be positive, spend more time in prayer and listen to the still, small voice of Him.

You say, “Now I would like to conclude by saying that :-be positive, spend time in prayer and trust the yearnings of your sou”

I would add an “L” to “sou”. And, I would delete “that” prior to the colon.

Every time I edit anything for someone the first thing I do is delete every “that” and every “which” not essential to conveying the message. They are two of the most overused words in the language.

If I weren’t retired, and if you actually wrote that paragraph I would ask you for 20 pages of your writing with the thought of possibly hiring you to write/edit technical copy. But alas, I am retired and have long since lost any influence I ever had. I do want you to know; IMO you have serious potential as a writer…