A few days ago
Anonymous

Whats your opinion or suggestion on my intro paragraph?

Extraterrestrial Disclosure Not Advisable

“I’m not at liberty to discuss the governments knowledge of extraterrestrial UFO’s at this time. I am still personally being briefed on the subject!” said ex President Richard M. Nixon.

Some of the United States top secret extraterrestrial information is beyond the control and knowledge of even the president. There are groups of people which have dedicated their entire lives to researching and trying to prove to the world that there is secret evidence of

extraterrestrials that the US government is hiding .The U.S should not disclose evidence of extraterrestrials to the American people yet; if there are any. If the U.S decides to disclose extraterrestrial information, the American people are going to know that in fact the U.S does have information hidden from the public, and as a result, the United States will become untrustworthy. Also, many Americans are not prepared to mentally and emotionally accept the fact that we may not be the onl

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A few days ago
Anonymous

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I proofread and made some changes. See what you think.

“I’m not at liberty to discuss the government’s knowledge of extraterrestrial UFO’s at this time. I am still personally being briefed on the subject!”–ex President Richard M. Nixon.

Some of the United States top secret extraterrestrial information lies beyond the knowledge of even the president, and there are groups who have dedicated their lives to researching and proving there is evidence of extraterrestrials that the United States government is hiding. If proof exists, the government should not disclose that evidence of extraterrestrials to the American people because in turn, the public will know that the government has been hiding information from the public. As a result, the United States will become untrustworthy. Additionally, many Americans are not prepared for the mental and emotional shock associated with such a revelation.

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A few days ago
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It’s a well-written intro paragraph, I think… I don’t see anything wrong with it except it could be shorter, or maybe broken up into at least 2 paragraphs. That won’t hurt the whole intro idea, since as an intro a couple of paragraphs can still be used, I’d think.

I disagree with the ET part though, in reality but also kidding you a bit! I’m ready for the ET info… bring it on!

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A few days ago
zacaljul2004
Great topic, I’d check for conventions, such as U.S. and so forth, but besides that, you seem to have started with something attention grabbing. It should work, but if this is persuasive, you may come off a tad bit like a loon and they won’t believe you, unless you have FACTUAL evidence. I would love to see the outcome of whatever you may be writing this for.
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