A few days ago
Anonymous

improving sentences?

We can become great leaders by making a stand and being strong like some of our historical leaders.

how can I make this sentence better.

thanks

Top 7 Answers
A few days ago
Snehal

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Everybody has the ability to become great leaders by being powerful and standing up for our beliefs like some of our past historical leaders.
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A few days ago
Mike G
It’s fine — it’s just a little general because it’s setting up an idea. The real test of whether or not it’s good writing will depend on the sentences that come afterward, which should give specific examples of the action you’re describing here.

If you did want to edit this sentence, you could change the phrasing so you don’t use “leaders” twice, and perhaps cut out the vague and overused phrase “making a stand” — i.e., “We can strengthen our leadership skills by examining the greatest acts of our historical leaders,” or something like that.

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A few days ago
Anonymous
We can be great by making a stand and being strong like some of our historical leaders.

Being great leaders requires that we make a stand and we stay strong like the great historical leaders in our history.

We can be great by making a stand and being strong like some of our historical leaders.

Using our great historical leaders to guide our way we can make a stand and be great ourselves.

The old guys in the past are cool and did cool stuff; we can do cool stuff too.

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A few days ago
Jon
We can become great and powerful leaders by making a stand and becoming strong, using our influential historical heralds as an example.
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A few days ago
Kermitbust
Strength and conviction will make us great leaders as history shows us.
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A few days ago
gamemeister27
First, get rid of because, that only makes sentences weak. Any lazy verbs out there (non action verbs) should be removed. If 1st person isn’t nessescary, get rid of that as well.
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A few days ago
Zyxel
separating it with a semicolon
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