Help with awkward sentences…?
–In the last sentence, I am not sure if “ideals” is the right word to use to describe what I mentioned in the first 2 sentences…also, the last sentence sounds awkward, especially the part “…and used them to succeed to many aspects of my life, including in high school and…” Any suggestions?
“I raised money and collected eyeglasses before departing to India. The money was used to cover the cost of the cataract surgeries that were provided for the Indians for free.”
–Is there a better way to phrase the last sentence?
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Before departing to India, I raised money and collected eyeglasses. The money was used to cover the cost of the cataract surgeries that were provided for the Indians for free.
I would write the second sentence like this:
I raised money and collected eyeglasses before departing to India. The money was used to cover the cost of the cataract surgeries that were provided for the Indians AT NO COST TO THEM, rather than FOR THE INDIANS FOR FREE.
Hope that helps.
I ?assisted? in the raising of money before departing to India. ?My group? I (washed cars, cleaned houses…), and collected eye-glasses to help with the funding. The proceeds from all of this was used to assist the people of India in their need of cataract surgeries so they could be provided a free service.
Hope this helps! your last sentence was a little unclear if the $$ from glasses paid for the surgery or was the surgery free to begin with.
What grade are you in?
/15 sophomore
How is that.
“Including my Education.”
in the last one try getting ride of the for free you already stated earlier in the sentence that the cost was being coverd. or try putting in “…cataract surgeries for those who couldnt afford it.
hope this helps.
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