A few days ago
Does this sentence sound right?
It’s the topic sentence to a college paper:
Once a year, a group of my friends and I take a hike on Mount Si and appreciate the two sides of our surroundings: biology and art.
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This is better
Once a year a group of my friends and I take a hike on Mount Si to appreciate two aspects of our surroundings: biology and art.
Unless you think there are only two “sides” to the location
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A few days ago
Once a year, a group of my friends and I hike on Mount Si to appreciate the two sides of our surroundings: biology and art.
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A few days ago
You might be able to clean it up:
Once a year, a group of my friends and I take a hike on Mount Si and appreciate two aspects of our surroundings: biology and art.
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A few days ago
It sounds okay, but could use some improvement. Try splitting the sentence into two sentences.
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A few days ago
It implies that there are only two sides to your surroundings, when there are infinity sides. Instead try:
“appreciate two aspects of our surroundings”
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A few days ago
I get what they are trying to say, they just need to word “two sides of our surroundings” differently.
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Perfect! I’m intrigued. Pity I can’t read the finished product. Good luck on your paper!
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Sounds good.
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A few days ago
Yes. Though I would use a comma instead of a :
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A few days ago
That makes a lot of sense to me.
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