A few days ago
T Lapp

Does this sentence sound right?

It’s the topic sentence to a college paper:

Once a year, a group of my friends and I take a hike on Mount Si and appreciate the two sides of our surroundings: biology and art.

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A few days ago
Kathi

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This is better

Once a year a group of my friends and I take a hike on Mount Si to appreciate two aspects of our surroundings: biology and art.

Unless you think there are only two “sides” to the location

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A few days ago
goodkharma333
Once a year, a group of my friends and I hike on Mount Si to appreciate the two sides of our surroundings: biology and art.
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A few days ago
Elana
You might be able to clean it up:

Once a year, a group of my friends and I take a hike on Mount Si and appreciate two aspects of our surroundings: biology and art.

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A few days ago
Jess
It sounds okay, but could use some improvement. Try splitting the sentence into two sentences.
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A few days ago
suzanne g
It implies that there are only two sides to your surroundings, when there are infinity sides. Instead try:

“appreciate two aspects of our surroundings”

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A few days ago
trippystemny
I get what they are trying to say, they just need to word “two sides of our surroundings” differently.
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A few days ago
Anonymous
Perfect! I’m intrigued. Pity I can’t read the finished product. Good luck on your paper!
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A few days ago
ruth4526
Sounds good.
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A few days ago
graciesfather
Yes. Though I would use a comma instead of a :
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A few days ago
Soda
That makes a lot of sense to me.
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