Your essay sounds childish and has NO depth whatsoever. Your rhetorical question of when a doctor becomes a “friend” is worded incorrectly. You assume too much.

If you want to show your passion for becoming a doctor, you do is poorly. You only scratch the surface of what you’ve DONE, not where your true passion and drive comes from.

WHY do you want to be a doctor? From what this little paragraph states, it seems that you reason is “because you’ve already been doing stuff like it”… JUST because you help people, doesn’t mean you have a passion for it….

Every person that i help is also a doctor. Every person that comes to me is in need for mental help or physical help “there patients”. At what point of the history did a doctor become more then a trusted and learned friend who visited and treated the ill. I believe a Doctor’s mission should not be just to prevent death to improve quality of life. You treat a disease you win and lose you treat a person I guarantee you will win. I want to be a doctor with all my heart. I want to be a doctor so i can serve others. I have shared the lives of my patients As a personal care attendant. I’ve laughed I’ve cried with them this is what I want to do with my life

this is what you wrote, maybe if you read it again, you will see that this is not something that you want to put into your college essay.