A few days ago
nys679

Can you take a quick look at this and maybe guide me to decide about this written work of mine?

I should submit an overview of my project that has been about Electronic Learning Technologies for the higher education university that I am going to apply. The whole of my project was about 100 pages but its overview, that I should submit will be almost 7-8 pages. Actually I’m not even sure if it’s good to present this part of the project that is a survey about my country in the beginning this project overview or not…..

I would be glad to know your idea about this part and also anything related to its English writing,etc, that may improve its writing quality.

tnx..

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Before starting to carry out this study, I decided to make a survey among high school graduated students in my country , in order to learn possible factors as to why so many of them have to leave their education after finishing their high school educations.

According to this statistical investigation, a great proportion (about 40%) of the students in Turkey, despite possessing proper qualifications to continue their studies and to attend universities and colleges of higher education, have to leave their education after finishing their high schools, and only less than 20% of these aspiring students are able to find a job after graduating from their schools, and this can cause many psychological complications and issues such as their depression, and at the best case, their isolation from the social activities which may affect their prosperity and future responsibilities.

The statistics of my investigation illustrated that the main reasons why so many high school graduates have to leave their studies in that level are one or a combination of the following:

– The first reason which about 80% of high school graduated students mentioned, was insufficient number of schools and universities for higher education, especially governmental universities that have affordable expenses in compared to private institutes and universities. Also the very limited capacity of accredited universities in Turkey versus a large population of universities’ applicants.

– The second reason which more than 60% of students cited among their reasons was the location of universities in most of cities and long distances that make them to spend a lot of time to be able to attend them. Having to take long distances and spending too much time in commuting between their work places, universities and their habitats or having to select the second choice of living in remote cities, with the minimum equipments were among these reasons.

– More than 48% of these students were not able to arrange to have regular presence in the educational classes due to the fact that many of them had responsibilities of their own or even their family’s living expenses and in some other cases their occupational programs were not matched or adjusted with the arranged curriculum and times of the classes in universities.

– And finally, about 18% of students mentioned the low number of universities which can offer education with high quality and their deficiencies in providing students with proper equipments suitable for certain educational fields. Some of them also mentioned students’ dissatisfaction of traditional style of education and standards of teaching and assessing in current traditional method of learning.

This statistics reveal that, the insufficient number of educational classes matched with student’s demands, the low capacity of classes in the current traditional style education, difficulty or impossibility in transportations and time consuming transportations and unaffordable expenses on traditional style education, whether caused by personal or vocational situations are the most substantial and noticeable factors in discontinuing education from students’ point of view.

Other reasons such as students’ dissatisfaction of teaching and incompatibility between student’s potencies and abilities in learning with methods of instruction and assessment in traditional style education courses are also among the important reasons why so many qualified and aspiring graduates have to leave their intents, hopes and ambitions across reaching their higher education.

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A few days ago
Calchas

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It is structured well but the statistics seem dubious.
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