Bob has enrolled in our school for the spring semester of 2008, the final semester of the course. The semester begins January 30 and ends on the 26th of March. Once Bob passes the final exams in May, he will receive his well earned certificate of merit.

It says the same thing but simplifies it, makes the point, and reads easily. “Well earned ” could be changed to “long awaited” or “Hard fought for,” any phrase suggesting the personal value and meaning of the award.

This student has only one semester left for his/her X certificate. He/she has been enrolled at our school for the Spring Semester, 2008. This student will have his/her X certificate once he/she has passed the final exams in May, 2008.

Note that I eliminated the part that explains the dates of that semester. You may want to put that back in if you feel it’s necessary. I thought it was just a bit too much.

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When you do not know the sex of the person, English defaults to the male form “He” or “Him” or “His”. (not always capitalized).

Months of the year are always capitalized.

Substituting the name instead of “This Student” is certainly a valid possibility. If you do so, the change “He” or “Him” or “His”. (not always capitalized) to the correct “She” or “Her” or “Her”. (not always capitalized) if “This student” is female.

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Elizabeth has only one semester left for her X certificate. She has been enrolled at our school for the Spring Semester 2008 starting January 30th and ending May 26th. She will have her X certificate once she has passed the final exams in May 2008.

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I’m hoping you are using a real name instead of he/she. If not, please use ‘their’. If you are referring to a specific student & you have their permission to use their name, use it – PLEASE! It’s makes the paragraph move better. I’m hoping “X” stands for a specific certificate & that you’ll be using that name too.

Hope this helps.