A few days ago
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Help please..?

I am a 17 year old girl and currently a senior of the 2007-2008 school year. Next year I wish to go to college and pursue a job in Journalism but I have no money. I applied for a scholarship (I’m in the final 10 finalists!) and I need votes so if you could please read my essay and possibly vote for it or encourage others to then it would be VERY appreciated. There are also 9 other great finalists if you wish to look at theirs too.

Here’s the link to my essay: http://collegetoolkit.com/ScholarshipContest/Finalists/Vote/ashummz05.aspx

If that doesn’t work go to collegetoolkit.com and my personal finalist name is ashummz05, however there are 9 others also. 🙂

You register, vote, and then do the email confirmation for it to count. This may only take a moment of your time, but it will be a huge part in my life.

Thankyou all.

My email address is [email protected] if you have ANY questions.

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A few days ago
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First sentence uses ‘always’ twice, remove one.

Second paragraph, ‘whom’ is incorrect, should be ‘who’.

Fourth paragraph, should be ‘help others out’.

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